tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1535194484558017781.post230833154908394746..comments2023-08-13T07:26:24.396-07:00Comments on A Bit of This, A Bit of That: Story Extract- Part 2!The Writer http://www.blogger.com/profile/05331031932386284456noreply@blogger.comBlogger7125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1535194484558017781.post-8412230423306830532015-06-09T18:38:54.804-07:002015-06-09T18:38:54.804-07:00Hey PenGirl,
Great job on the dialogue between ou...Hey PenGirl,<br /><br />Great job on the dialogue between our mystery man and Miss Smith. Nice structuring too!<br /><br />I’m also really impressed by your rich imagery, especially of your recurring use of “water symbolism” to describe the horror and apprehension our Miss Smith is feeling. The gravity or “weight" of this horror is so intense that it can almost be compared to a “physical pressure” that burdens her. So this “water symbolism” is obviously extremely important to your story. And it's awesome.<br /><br />For a future post maybe you can explore “water” as an important personal symbol for Miss Smith. Has Miss Smith personally suffered any past negative experiences with water? In her eyes, why does water = discomfort? It’d be great if you elaborate further on this symbolism.<br /><br />Secondly, maybe you can give us readers a more detailed description of this mystery man’s appearance? Maybe include his (approx.) height, weight and age. His facial characteristics would also fill in lots of gaps. We'd then be able to imagine him in our heads!<br /><br />It's obviously getting more developed so keep writing PenGirl!<br /><br />Also I'm sure we'd be delighted if you chose to revisit one of your older extracts and expanded it further!<br /><br />Brain BoxBrain Boxnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1535194484558017781.post-59724716186773959302015-06-06T06:54:53.865-07:002015-06-06T06:54:53.865-07:00What a great post, I loved it :)What a great post, I loved it :)Noorhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00632409992742705091noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1535194484558017781.post-8614070424879508552015-06-03T12:17:09.445-07:002015-06-03T12:17:09.445-07:00Wow your amazing at writing xx :)
http://agirlblo...Wow your amazing at writing xx :) <br />http://agirlblogx.blogspot.co.uk/a girlhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04186156084736356646noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1535194484558017781.post-77193374559074381332015-06-03T11:59:50.262-07:002015-06-03T11:59:50.262-07:00Thank you Galaxy! I am glad you liked it!Thank you Galaxy! I am glad you liked it!The Writer https://www.blogger.com/profile/05331031932386284456noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1535194484558017781.post-14260989001484710012015-06-03T11:59:17.780-07:002015-06-03T11:59:17.780-07:00Thank you so much, I am glad you liked it! And an ...Thank you so much, I am glad you liked it! And an as massive congratulations to you for guessing right!The Writer https://www.blogger.com/profile/05331031932386284456noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1535194484558017781.post-4870033312176002232015-06-03T10:42:59.918-07:002015-06-03T10:42:59.918-07:00You're so so x 199 talented at writing!
This ...You're so so x 199 talented at writing!<br /><br />This was so mysterious and intriguing!<br /><br />Ooh, I JUST LOVE IT!<br /> <br /><br />XOXO<br /><br />P.S. YAY! We guessed it! xoxoMiss Internethttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10596344934823347181noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1535194484558017781.post-20060928802853809902015-06-03T10:06:38.619-07:002015-06-03T10:06:38.619-07:00I'm loving this story extract! Really good job...I'm loving this story extract! Really good job! <br /><br /><br />GalaxyGalaxy18https://www.blogger.com/profile/12138002449246318928noreply@blogger.com